There’s rhythm in writing! 🎶
這個禮拜Presentality的Andrew來分享英文寫作的節奏!
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我的工作需要看非常多的英文。
其中有英文母語的人寫的,也有非母語的人寫的。最近,我注意到一個兩者之間很明顯的差別。這個差別很少有人提到,因為它無關文法正確,也不是有學問的用語,或是文雅的詞彙。
是句子的長短。
Well,更正確的來說,是長句跟短句的交錯。我發現,非母語人士寫的英文句子,不但比英文母語的人寫的長,而且是大部分句子都很長。
母語的人,尤其是很會寫的人,則是會把長句跟短句混合搭配。
那又怎樣?
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你可能會說 ok,以英文為母語的人比較會用短的句子,那又怎樣?句子的長短,跟我寫作的好壞,有關嗎?
關係可大了。
就像音樂,或是影片,文字也是「內容」。只要是「內容」,就有它的節奏。你可以想像一首曲子,從頭到尾都是很長的音,而且一點變化都沒有嗎?或是一部很長的影片,從頭到尾都是很長的畫面,而且一點節奏的變化都沒有嗎?
Well actually,你應該可以想像,這些就是要幫助我們睡眠的。
如果你不想要你的讀者覺得無聊或甚至睡著,我建議適度變換你文字的節奏。
但我們先看案例。
我拿一篇台灣人寫的文,跟另一篇美國人寫的,來做比較:把每個句子都分拆成不同的段落,句子的長短就一目了然了。
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但我們先看案例。
我拿一篇台灣人寫的文,跟另一篇美國人寫的,來做比較:把每個句子都分拆成不同的段落,句子的長短就一目了然了。
📌 台灣案例:Taipei Times Opinion
1. The TAIEX last month rose above 17,000 points as rallies in steel, shipping and some non-tech stocks offset a weakness in semiconductor and electronics stocks.
2. While news about a cluster of local COVID-19 infections connected with China Airlines cargo pilots and a hotel in Taoyuan fueled selling pressure early this month and pushed the local stock market into consolidation mode, the daily market turnover in the first two trading sessions of this month hit fresh highs.
3. Moreover, Taiwan’s stock trading volume last month began to surpass that of Hong Kong for the first time in 15 years, which was beyond most market participants’ expectations.
4. Taiwan’s daily market turnover exceeding Hong Kong’s might gradually become a new normal from this year, and there are good reasons for this.
5. First, Hong Kong’s stock market has lost its appeal to foreign investors since China last year imposed national security legislation on the territory, triggering a potential flight of capital and talent.
6. Second, many wealthy Taiwanese tend to park their overseas funds in Hong Kong, China, Singapore, Switzerland and the US, but government statistics showed that more than 80 percent of funds repatriated by wealthy individuals last year were from Hong Kong, as they saw the political situation in the territory worsen after its self-governance, human rights and freedom of speech were further suppressed.
7. Third, China’s new NASDAQ-style stock board — the Shanghai Stock Exchange’s STAR board — has emerged as a fast-growing capital markets center for Chinese companies at a time when rising China-US tensions have triggered concerns about their prospects of listing in New York, posing a growing challenge to the Hong Kong stock exchange.
8. On the other hand, Taiwan’s economic fundamentals, the central bank’s adoption of extraordinary monetary easing and the government’s fiscal policies have fueled continued rallies in the nation’s stock market since last year.
9. It might be too early to tell how long the consolidation trend might last, as a resurgent COVID-19 outbreak is coloring the global economic outlook, but some insight can be drawn from the stock market:
10. Taiwan’s GDP grew a larger-than-expected 8.16 percent in the first quarter, as exports and private investment remained healthy.
都是一堆很長的句子對不對?我們來看美國人寫的句子,也是一個主流媒體的 opinion 文。
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📌 美國案例:New York Times Opinion
1. I miss torturing Liz Cheney.
2. But it must be said that the petite blonde from Wyoming suddenly seems like a Valkyrie amid halflings.
3. She is willing to sacrifice her leadership post — and risk her political career — to continue calling out Donald Trump’s Big Lie.
4. She has decided that, if the price of her job is being as unctuous to Trump as Kevin McCarthy is, it isn’t worth it, because McCarthy is totally disgracing himself.
5. It has been a dizzying fall for the scion of one of the most powerful political families in the land, a conservative chip off the old block who was once talked about as a comer, someone who could be the first woman president.
6. How naïve I was to think that Republicans would be eager to change the channel after Trump cost them the Senate and the White House and unleashed a mob on them.
7. I thought the Donald would evaporate in a poof of orange smoke, ending a supremely screwed-up period of history.
8. But the loudest mouth is not shutting up.
9. And Republicans continue to listen, clinging to the idea that the dinosaur is the future.
10. “We can’t grow without him,” Lindsey Graham said.
📌 Note: 即使是比較長的句子,這位作者也會用標點符號拆散它:She is willing to sacrifice her leadership post — and risk her political career — to continue calling out Donald Trump’s Big Lie. 這就好比用句點一樣,讓我們讀起來有點停頓休息的時間。
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📌 注意到了嗎?
台灣人寫的英文,句子都偏長,而且長度都差不多。
美國人寫的就不一樣了:一個只有五個字的句子開頭,然後一堆稍微長一點的句子,然後再來一串短句。
你可能懷疑我故意挑選很極端了例子出來,而且幹嘛專門打台灣人呢?
所以想到這裡,我從我的書架上,隨便挑了兩本跟科技有關的書出來。左邊的,是美國人,矽谷知名投資人 Peter Thiel。右邊的是德國人,但注意了,是一個英文非常好的德國人。他不但是世界經濟論壇的創辦人,研究所也是在哈佛大學唸的。
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📌 兩本書 Introduction 是怎麼寫的?
Klaus Schwab (德國):
Of the many diverse and fascinating challenges we face today, the most intense and important is how to understand and shape the new technology revolution, which entails nothing less than a transformation of humankind.
We are at the beginning of a revolution that is fundamentally changing the way we live, work, and relate to one another.
In its scale, scope and complexity, what I consider to be the fourth industrial revolution is unlike anything humankind has experienced before.
Peter Thiel (美國):
Whenever I interview someone for a job, I like to ask this question: "What important truth do very few people agree with you on?"
The question sounds easy because it's straightforward.
Actually, it's very hard to answer.
It's intellectually difficult because the knowledge that everyone is taught in school is by definition agreed upon.
See the difference?
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📌 如何變換節奏呢?
需要Andrew的完整分享請留言「There’s rhythm in writing~」。
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after school正雅 在 ETtoday星光雲 Facebook 的最讚貼文
Jae Jae細心的觀察和訪問~常常讓來賓超驚訝
所以節目能一直開紅盤很合理啊🙌(歐爺)
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#재재 Wonderlab,艾利斯的追劇外一章
after school正雅 在 韓國泡菜日記 Facebook 的最佳解答
After school 睽違十年!再度合體
重現經典歌曲「bang」「DIVA」
正雅挺6個月的肚子也要一起同台
實在太感人啦~ 二代Kpop 粉們
一起來經典回顧一下吧~
After school - Diva
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After school - bang
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after school正雅 在 電扶梯走左邊 Jacky Youtube 的最佳解答
✨本集來賓:James Hu - CEO & founder / Jobscan.co
https://www.linkedin.com/in/jameshujobscan/
- 成績不好也能創業成功當上老闆,只要開始努力都不算晚,謹記成功還是失敗都是自己的 | Grades don’t determine your future, your attitude does.
- 自省的力量:有策略的努力,比低頭苦幹更重要!| Importance of self introspection, work hard with the big picture direction in mind
- 創業家最強大的武器-大於常人的動機 | Motivations of an entrepreneur
- 使用者是你最重要的投資人 | Your customers are your most important investors
- 冥想、Think Week ,你能每天靜下十分鐘思考嗎 | Meditation, think week, 10 minutes a day
- 凡事先開始才有以後 | Do things that don’t scale
📚 Books Mentioned:
- Rich Dad, Poor Dad 富爸爸·窮爸爸
- 7 Habits of Highly Effective People 與成功有約
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(00:01:15) 用三個字形容自己 | 3 words describe yourself
(00:02:26) 求學過程 沒考上 再花兩年轉學進夢想大學 | Not getting into school wanted, 2 year journey to transfer
(00:04:15) 成績不行 靠工作經驗來補 | Work experiences to compensate bad grades
(00:04:50) 免費工作 只為了零售轉白領 | Working for free to learn a skill
(00:05:46) 不屈不饒的申請Microsoft實習 | Getting internship at Microsoft
(00:07:10) 學校帶給你的無形幫助 | Intangibles learned in school
(00:08:06) 終於進到Microsoft | Finally getting into Microsoft
(00:08:24) 2008金融風暴 Microsoft解僱五千人 | Then getting laid off
(00:09:36) 因為「富爸爸窮爸爸」 23歲就買房子 開啟投資理財之路 | Buying a house at 23, jounrey of finance
(00:11:33) 又回Microsoft 但薪水少1/3 | Taking a big pay cut
(00:12:07) 2010 從西雅圖到北京 | Seattle to Beijing
(00:12:58) 白天全職Groupon 晚上創業 | 2 jobs
(00:13:51) 土法煉鋼 做出「我搭車」App | Brute force ride sharing start up
(00:15:22) 贏得北京Startup Weekend 第二屆 第二名 | Second place at Beijing startup competition
(00:16:08) 創業最困難的挫折 | Hardest thing of doing start ups
(00:17:35) 沒有完善的商業模式 努力兩年最終結束創業 | Closing up the company
(00:20:13) 創業應該找好朋友還是單純夥伴 | Friend & business partner
(00:21:18) 美國創業 vs. 中國創業的差別 | Doing a startUp in US vs China
(00:22:48) 山寨和原創之間 | Imitation vs original
(00:24:21) 意外60天二度創業 JobScan | 60 days to start second start up
(00:26:27) 先求有再求好 | Do things that don’t scale
(00:28:24) 成功融資帶來的錯覺 | Illusion of success from fundraising
(00:31:27) 創業會選擇做大規模 還是單純有被動收入 | Going big or revenue
(00:33:48) 當你真心渴望 全宇宙都會聯合起來幫助你 | Being resourceful
(00:36:45) 聘請員工 高薪不是重點 | You don’t need to pay more for better talent
(00:39:26) 創業家視角:十年以後 | 10 year vision in entrepreneurship
(00:40:37) 進不了大學產生的人生理念 | Life views since not getting into desired college
(00:41:51) 最近的好習慣:十分鐘冥想 | 10 minutes meditation
(00:44:15) 慢慢來 比較快 | Slowing down is faster
(00:46:56) 時間管理 沒有大師 | Time management
(00:48:12) 效仿比爾蓋茲的Think Week | Bill Gates’s think week
(00:52:48) 面對家人離世仍保持正向 | Positive attitude despite family loss
(00:57:19) 對快樂的定義 | Definition of happiness
(00:58:56) 十年終於放了自己一年大假 | One year sabbatical after
after school正雅 在 ugishot Youtube 的最佳解答
AYO! GG!
沈寂三年之後,UG終於回歸了!
除了在台灣拍攝之外,這次特別跑去越南取景增添夏日風情
希望大家會喜歡這支歡樂又瘋狂的"PARTY" cover MV!
AYO! GG! After 3 years, UG is finally back!!!!!!!!! I feel so glad that I could shoot the video in my beloved country, Vietnam. Hope you all enjoy the crazy & fun "PARTY" cover music video :-)
♬ "PARTY" original SNSD music video:https://youtu.be/HQzu7NYlZNQ
♬ "PARTY" comparison version:http://youtu.be/u7yhO24AMcA
最近常常遇到朋友問我,為什麼你這麼久沒新作品
這次終於要「復出」拍Party MV呢?
我通常都是開玩笑的回說:
「因為這次的舞比較簡單啊!」
「因為剛好最近有空嘛!」
「時機到了,我怕大家會忘記我!」
但說真的,百忙之中抽空認真地要完成新MV的真正原因
其實是這次的回歸對少時、對SONE來說真的太重要
經過去年九月Jessica離團的重大衝擊之後
八人編制的少時背負著SONE的期望與自己對自己的期許
在今年夏天再一次的帶給我們充滿歡笑、動感的新作品
讓這近三年時間都忙於工作的我覺得好心疼又好感動
心疼的是經歷了這麼深刻的「變故」她們依舊笑容燦爛
感動的是少女們依舊堅持著理想,做好自己該做的、喜愛的事
無論再累、無論有再多困難
堅持自己心中所愛,就是一件很美的事
這是我從少女時代身上學到
也是我希望透過自己的作品讓大家感受到的
祝福少女時代,祝福鄭秀妍,祝福所有SONE
So let's have party and step into the new world!!!
【導演 Director】
梁鈺杰 Eugene Liang
【製片 Producer】
梁鈺杰 Eugene Liang
【後製 Film Editting】
梁鈺杰 Eugene Liang
【友情演出 Cast】
周欣穎 Betsy Chou
葉思辰 Sammi Yeh
傳播學程1st-4th屆 NCCU CCUDP 1st-4tf
Party people of Anh & Khanh's Wedding
【攝影 Cinemagraphy】
賴珮汶 Lai Pei-Wen
陳慧芸 Harriet Chen
Do Thanh Tinh
周欣穎 Betsy Chou
葉思辰 Sammi Yeh
梁鈺杰 Eugene Liang
【器材協力 Camera Sponsors】
曾莉甯 Momo Zeng
周欣穎 Betsy Chou
【服裝協力 Costume】
葉思辰 Sammi Yeh
夏偉瀚 Divawei Hsia
【歌詞翻譯 Lyrics Translation】
吳詠馨 Sara Wu
【特別感謝 Special Thanks To...】
Khanh Luong
Vu Viet Anh
Do Thanh Tinh
Nguyen Cong Hoang Lam
Vo Tran Khoa
Thieu Dung Nguyen Sang
Nguyen Anh Tuan
葉思辰 Sammi Yeh
周欣穎 Betsy Chou
賴珮汶 Lai Pei-Wen
陳慧芸 Harriet Chen
曾莉甯 Momo Zeng
盧彥澤 Zach Lu
夏偉瀚 Divawei Hsia
吳詠馨 Sara Wu
邱怡菁 Chiu Yi-Ching
薛永南 Pierce Xsueh
楊斯茜 Olivia Yang
鄭心雅 Cindy Cheng
蘇怡嘉 Allison Su
丁亞雯 Ding Ya-Wen
許 凌 Lynn Hsu
翟 鳴 Zhai Ming
丁 鳴 Ding Ming
劉小純 Liu Xiaochun
趙 昭 Zhao Zhao
劉嘉明 James Liu
林美妤 Winice Lin
周品頡 Josie Chou
潘信宏 George Pan
林珏竹 Erica Lin
周尚儀 Esther Chou
溫澤元 Lars Wen
國父紀念館 Sun Yat-Sen Memorial Hall
星聚點KTV New CB Party
仙草時代 Mesana Generation
丁善理紀念學校 Lawrence S. Ting School
越捷航空 Vietjet Airline
N-Dung Hotel
巖灣度假村酒店 Rock Bay Resort
台北市政府 Taipei City
胡志明市政府 Ho Chi Minh City
藩切市政府 Phan Thiet City
頭頓市政府 Vung Tau City
VS Media
優酷牛人 Youku Niu Ren
優酷音樂頻道 Youku Music Channel
政大傳播學程 NCCU CCUDP
佳映娛樂國際股份有限公司 Joint Entertainment
批踢踢少時板 PTT_SNSD
SM娛樂公司 SM Entertainment
每一位不小心入鏡的人
Everyone in this video
每一位期待我有新作品的人
Everyone expecting for my videos
我親愛的家人
My dearest family, Dad, Mom, Sis and Bro
當然,還要謝謝少女時代,感謝你們一直都在
Of course, I need to thank Girls' Generation.
Thanks for always being our brave and shinin girls!
☞ Facebook UG's Generation :https://www.facebook.com/UGisHOT
♬ UG's Generation_PARTY_Music Video ℗ U.G.Entertainment
♬ Girls' Generation 소녀시대_PARTY_Music Video ℗ S.M.Entertainment
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